Thursday, August 16, 2007

In 3/4


















like a dance floor
it waits

birds skid by
laughing

doesn't matter how
you get here

if you have the guts
to try

the wind blew through
yesterday

blew the clouds
all away

left me and the sky
breathless

me and the sky
breathless

23 Comments:

Blogger zhoen said...

You make me want to sing and waltz.


Ok, not that unusual, but always welcome.

8/16/2007 4:51 PM  
Blogger MB said...

Z, that was the idea!

8/16/2007 4:54 PM  
Anonymous marja-leena said...

Amazing, this morning the sky here as almost exactly the same here! What a way to greet the day, eh!?

8/16/2007 5:15 PM  
Blogger mermaid said...

Who led?

8/16/2007 7:01 PM  
Anonymous Anonymous said...

By jove,
By jing
By mb is the thing...

8/17/2007 6:33 AM  
Blogger robin andrea said...

Such ecstasy in wind and sky.

8/17/2007 1:04 PM  
Blogger MB said...

M-L, sounds like it must have jump-started your day!

Mermaid, not me, that's for sure.

Anonyrhymer, thank you for introducing me to the song! You nailed it —
It laughs, it sings, the world is in rhyme
Swinging to three-quarter time


Robin Andrea, there is when we look well.

8/17/2007 1:12 PM  
Blogger Lori Witzel said...

Wheeeeeeee! All those windy swirls made me dizzy!

Thanks for the lovely, looping, loping dance!

8/17/2007 7:28 PM  
Blogger Angela Young said...

I love repeated phrases; they soothe and reassure me. And also, in this poem, they underline the beauty that makes for the breathlessness. Beautiful. And thank you for your rose comment.

8/18/2007 2:56 AM  
Blogger Sky said...

you and your words, your metaphors and similes, the images you paint with syllables and sound or photographs - it all leaves me breathless quite often!

8/19/2007 5:27 AM  
Blogger Tall Girl said...

Whoosh!

8/19/2007 10:21 AM  
Blogger rdl said...

Nice! very nice!!

8/19/2007 5:57 PM  
Blogger Richard Lawrence Cohen said...

Good one! Lovely metaphor for the sky, and rhythm and voice going along with it.

8/20/2007 9:59 AM  
Blogger alan said...

And they say nothing is written in waltz time anymore!

:o)

alan

8/20/2007 12:14 PM  
Blogger Pat Paulk said...

When's the next cd coming out?? You've left me breathless...

8/21/2007 11:45 AM  
Blogger PeterAtLarge said...

That repetition at the end works so well here. It does take the breath away, and leaves a lovely silence at the end. Cheers, PaL

8/21/2007 1:29 PM  
Blogger firebird said...

This poem blows all my clouds away!

Love the dancing free form--
Hope you keep the feeling!

8/24/2007 2:53 AM  
Blogger TaraDharma said...

this poem blows me clean away....striking image as well.

8/25/2007 2:01 PM  
Blogger Susangalique said...

I needed this poem today. I really like the part about having the guts to try. Just endeavoring to try something gives me much encouragment and peace.

very nice.

8/27/2007 8:25 PM  
Blogger Fred Garber said...

I have read this poem several times now and finally am commenting. I like it....a lot!

8/28/2007 10:18 AM  
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8/30/2007 11:08 PM  
Blogger rdl said...

keep hoping that you will post. hope all is well.

9/08/2007 7:06 PM  
Blogger Michelle (a.k.a. la vie en rose) said...

and you left me breathless... beautiful writing

9/12/2007 11:55 AM  

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