In 3/4
like a dance floor
it waits
birds skid by
laughing
doesn't matter how
you get here
if you have the guts
to try
the wind blew through
yesterday
blew the clouds
all away
left me and the sky
breathless
me and the sky
breathless
posted by MB at 3:33 PM
22 Comments:
You make me want to sing and waltz.
Ok, not that unusual, but always welcome.
Z, that was the idea!
Amazing, this morning the sky here as almost exactly the same here! What a way to greet the day, eh!?
Who led?
By jove,
By jing
By mb is the thing...
Such ecstasy in wind and sky.
M-L, sounds like it must have jump-started your day!
Mermaid, not me, that's for sure.
Anonyrhymer, thank you for introducing me to the song! You nailed it —
It laughs, it sings, the world is in rhyme
Swinging to three-quarter time
Robin Andrea, there is when we look well.
Wheeeeeeee! All those windy swirls made me dizzy!
Thanks for the lovely, looping, loping dance!
I love repeated phrases; they soothe and reassure me. And also, in this poem, they underline the beauty that makes for the breathlessness. Beautiful. And thank you for your rose comment.
you and your words, your metaphors and similes, the images you paint with syllables and sound or photographs - it all leaves me breathless quite often!
Whoosh!
Nice! very nice!!
Good one! Lovely metaphor for the sky, and rhythm and voice going along with it.
And they say nothing is written in waltz time anymore!
:o)
alan
When's the next cd coming out?? You've left me breathless...
That repetition at the end works so well here. It does take the breath away, and leaves a lovely silence at the end. Cheers, PaL
This poem blows all my clouds away!
Love the dancing free form--
Hope you keep the feeling!
this poem blows me clean away....striking image as well.
I needed this poem today. I really like the part about having the guts to try. Just endeavoring to try something gives me much encouragment and peace.
very nice.
I have read this poem several times now and finally am commenting. I like it....a lot!
keep hoping that you will post. hope all is well.
and you left me breathless... beautiful writing
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