Wednesday, August 30, 2006

The light in the dark

down by the river
in the night
the bushes were mostly black
and the water a
long winding wash of silver

and what flowed
between and around
us there
in the darkness

we rushed home
along the road
where the deer walked

and the flowers
beneath their hooves
suddenly shone


Blogger floots said...

i can feel it
love this

8/30/2006 11:24 PM  
Blogger Pat Paulk said...

Sounds like the flow of love/passion lights even the darkest night. This flows like "a long winding wash of silver". Love it!!

8/31/2006 4:21 AM  
Blogger Lori Witzel said...

Phosphorescent wonderfulness.

(BTW, thanks for coming by and leaving lovely pithy spot-on comments. Always nice to "see" you!)

8/31/2006 4:34 AM  
Anonymous Anonymous said...

the last eight lines kinda reminded me of "princess mononoke" :).. great piece :)..

8/31/2006 5:09 AM  
Blogger Sue hardy-Dawson said...

A lovely sense of light and shadow

8/31/2006 10:53 AM  
Blogger Brenda Clews said...

It's the small, fragile moments of illumination that... say it all.

8/31/2006 4:23 PM  
Blogger rdl said...

I like this one alot!

9/01/2006 4:48 AM  
Blogger MB said...

Floots, thank you. That's a gratifying response.

Pat, thank you for appreciating the metaphor and flow!

Lori, I could have described your comments the same way! Always interesting to see what you've been working on.

Guile, nice to see you here! "Princess Mononoke" — yes, I can see why! Thanks.

Sue, thanks!

Brenda, moments of illumination are something to wait for.

RDL, I'm glad you do! Thanks.

9/01/2006 8:27 AM  
Blogger Patrick M. Tracy said...


A crystalline image. This one tells a long story with a wonderful economy of words.

9/05/2006 9:18 AM  
Anonymous Anonymous said...

SO beautiful. Sorry I've gone missing - it has been a rough re-entry, but i'm catching up.
Can't wait to read what you've written in my absence!

9/05/2006 12:31 PM  
Blogger MB said...

Firehawk, yes it does. Thank you for your insight.

Anne, you have been missed. I'm glad you're home safely. Welcome back!

9/06/2006 10:40 PM  

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