Summer fires
the clapboard siding glows yellow
in the slow morning sun
above the roofline the thin sky
is restless grey with smoke
a sudden rush of doves
from out of the arching white sycamore
whirling pale on pale on pale
as if they decided this was the day
this was the moment to seize life
in the slow morning sun
above the roofline the thin sky
is restless grey with smoke
a sudden rush of doves
from out of the arching white sycamore
whirling pale on pale on pale
as if they decided this was the day
this was the moment to seize life
posted by MB at 9:01 AM
12 Comments:
Really love this one MB.
It builds and builds and then the abruptness of the ending just took my breath away and that last line echoed in my head (and vision).
thanks, xx
Don't think I could see this any clearer in a photograph. I think you came very close to touching with this poem!!
I like the pale colors -- the yellow light, the grey smoke, the doves an unstated grey, the white sycamore, the "pale on pale on pale," and the thinness of the lines matching that of the sky.
great poem! I like the pale on pale on pale. I love the doves entering the scene and I love that they decided to seize life. Very hopeful. Carries me away with the doves with a cozy feeling of peace.
It swells and bursts forth.
Slow light, Terry Pratchetts world has slow light.
Yes, I like this one too.
(oops, that last comment was me)
beautiful. means and says so much to me.
Stray, thank you!
Pat, what a wonderful thing to say. Thank you!
Richard, I like the things you saw in this. They are what I saw.
Eating poetry, thank you for stopping by! I'll take hope where I can find it.
zhoen, I need to get to Terry Pratchett's world.
Dave, thanks for letting me know!
Kelly, welcome! I'm pleased you enjoyed the poem.
This is so beautiful - from the clapboard siding glowing yellow to the pale on pale of the doves and its message to seize the moment.
What lovely colours you have painted and the joy and the freedom of flight
crafty green poet, thank you so much!
Sue, I'm pleased you enjoyed it!
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