Tuesday, August 15, 2006

Summer fires

the clapboard siding glows yellow
in the slow morning sun

above the roofline the thin sky
is restless grey with smoke

a sudden rush of doves
from out of the arching white sycamore

whirling pale on pale on pale
as if they decided this was the day

this was the moment to seize life

12 Comments:

Blogger Stray said...

Really love this one MB.

It builds and builds and then the abruptness of the ending just took my breath away and that last line echoed in my head (and vision).

thanks, xx

8/15/2006 9:25 AM  
Blogger Pat Paulk said...

Don't think I could see this any clearer in a photograph. I think you came very close to touching with this poem!!

8/15/2006 9:43 AM  
Blogger Richard Lawrence Cohen said...

I like the pale colors -- the yellow light, the grey smoke, the doves an unstated grey, the white sycamore, the "pale on pale on pale," and the thinness of the lines matching that of the sky.

8/15/2006 10:37 AM  
Blogger EATING POETRY said...

great poem! I like the pale on pale on pale. I love the doves entering the scene and I love that they decided to seize life. Very hopeful. Carries me away with the doves with a cozy feeling of peace.

8/15/2006 11:09 AM  
Blogger zhoen said...

It swells and bursts forth.

Slow light, Terry Pratchetts world has slow light.

8/15/2006 11:26 AM  
Anonymous Anonymous said...

Yes, I like this one too.

8/15/2006 5:05 PM  
Blogger Dave said...

(oops, that last comment was me)

8/15/2006 5:05 PM  
Blogger kelly rae said...

beautiful. means and says so much to me.

8/16/2006 5:20 PM  
Blogger MB said...

Stray, thank you!

Pat, what a wonderful thing to say. Thank you!

Richard, I like the things you saw in this. They are what I saw.

Eating poetry, thank you for stopping by! I'll take hope where I can find it.

zhoen, I need to get to Terry Pratchett's world.

Dave, thanks for letting me know!

Kelly, welcome! I'm pleased you enjoyed the poem.

8/17/2006 9:56 AM  
Blogger Crafty Green Poet said...

This is so beautiful - from the clapboard siding glowing yellow to the pale on pale of the doves and its message to seize the moment.

8/18/2006 6:22 AM  
Blogger Sue hardy-Dawson said...

What lovely colours you have painted and the joy and the freedom of flight

8/20/2006 9:51 AM  
Blogger MB said...

crafty green poet, thank you so much!

Sue, I'm pleased you enjoyed it!

8/21/2006 8:11 PM  

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