Wednesday, October 26, 2005

Snatch of a song

Some days are empty, like the day before
Lights are out, curtains closed, sign's up on the door
Some days are empty, and I'd give anything
Just to hear a bluebird sing

Find me a bluebird
In my own back yard
Climb me a mountain
Can't be that hard
Sing me a new song
Every day of my life
Going to find me that bluebird
Make it all come out right


Blogger Billy Jones said...

This is a great piece of work. Also, thanks for the mention below.

10/26/2005 5:18 PM  
Blogger garnet david said...

Sounds like a sweet John Denver song. (I liked his songs)

10/26/2005 7:05 PM  
Blogger MB said...

Thanks. I expect to work with this further, eventually.

10/27/2005 10:24 AM  
Blogger rdl said...

I like your poem alot. Will come again when i have time to read more.

10/30/2005 5:11 AM  
Blogger MB said...

Thanks, rdl, and welcome!

10/31/2005 9:17 AM  
Blogger katy said...

hello moose,
found your bloggerificness via billy the blogging poet's 100 blogging poets in 100 days. am making a point to read some of all of the blogs (becuase it's fun and a convinient way to make contact with other poets on the internet). anway, i thought i'd comment on this poem here... i love its two parts. though, they seem like very different poems. perhaps the difference between a verse and a chorus. the second stanza is a chant, with candor; the first is a plea, a poetic desire or a fairytale wish upon the stars. you said you might work on it more in the future? i would love to see more of the dynamic between the two stanza styles throughout a longer piece. a lovely introduction to your work on my behalf, thank you for blogging :)

11/01/2005 9:37 AM  
Blogger MB said...

Hi katy, and welcome!

Yes, the first is a verse, the second a chorus, and the whole thing is intended as a part of something larger... eventually.

Thanks for reading and commenting.

11/01/2005 12:46 PM  

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