Wednesday, April 19, 2006

Kiss the sky

when I see the translucent moon hanging
tenderly against brilliant blue
I want to

when I watch the sunlight move slowly behind
fistfuls, armloads of transparent petals overhead
I want to

when I see the flash of the doves above
turning in a sunlit wheel
I want to

when I feel the chill breeze against my face
whispering into my mouth
I want to

23 Comments:

Blogger Lhombre said...

OH! Now I want to too! What a gorgeous poem azulejo! Absolutely gorgeous!

The next to last line. Oh!

4/19/2006 2:07 PM  
Blogger Lee said...

Yes, truly emotive. Thank you.

4/19/2006 5:42 PM  
Blogger alan said...

As I came home from work at 2AM last night there was a huge moon rising just above the horizon; I thought of you...

alan

4/20/2006 1:57 AM  
Blogger gracie said...

lovely, mb... beautiful images

4/20/2006 4:27 AM  
Blogger Lori Witzel said...

Ahhhhhhhhhhhh.

Me too.

4/20/2006 4:29 AM  
Blogger Brenda said...

Do you know how beautiful this is, and what a lift reading your poem has given me each time... the images are stunning. And I agree with LHombre, that second to last line is most special: intimate, sensual, tactile, truly feeling-in-form.

4/20/2006 6:17 AM  
Blogger Rexroth's Daughter said...

This is really beautiful, MB. The imagery is, as Brenda says, intimate, sensual, tactile. I am moved by poems that are like calligraphy. In a few brush strokes--the world.

4/20/2006 8:40 AM  
Anonymous yllstonewolf said...

i always feel so moved when i see that tender pale moon in the morning sky. your poem is gorgeous - and says it all. it is spare, like a watercolor sketch - but absolutely complete! love it here!

4/20/2006 8:50 AM  
Blogger snowsparkle said...

oh oh oh and oh!!! this made my heart leap. and then it soared even higher when i heard jimi echo: "excuse me while i kiss the sky!" i have to admit, i have kissed a fir tree's needles, a rock, a feather, but your poem has presented a whole new invitation. you truly know love in all it's forms. thank you for this beautifully shared gift! big hugs! snowsparkle

4/20/2006 9:11 AM  
Blogger Dale said...

Oh all of it, but especially the last stanza!

4/20/2006 11:40 AM  
Blogger Endment said...

Me too

4/21/2006 4:56 AM  
Blogger T L Reynolds said...

Like Dale, I am really drawn to the last stanza. I love the breeze "whispering into my mouth". This is a loaded image that can go in many directions. Could even be the voice of the poem(?)

4/21/2006 8:33 AM  
Blogger Sue hardy-Dawson said...

Really gorgious, sorry can't spell it but I mean it

4/21/2006 11:10 AM  
Blogger Firehawk said...

MB,

A wonderful meta-call and response piece. I really enjoyed the imagery here, and the emotion.

4/21/2006 1:05 PM  
Blogger garnet david said...

joyous wanting to...

4/21/2006 7:31 PM  
Blogger Tongue in Cheek Antiques said...

I want to!
you have such a good way with expressing and being poetry!

4/21/2006 11:35 PM  
Blogger Sky said...

images are so clearly drawn by these descriptive and fluid words -so much action - "hanging, moving, flashing, whispering." your poetry is so evocative, always painting...with words - just beautiful.

4/22/2006 2:01 AM  
Blogger Jean said...

Merveilleux !
Cet un splendide chant à la VIE !

4/22/2006 2:18 AM  
Blogger Poetry by Kai said...

beautigul..........

4/22/2006 7:07 AM  
Blogger mermaid said...

Clever use of title.

The 'sunlit wheel' was my favorite.

4/22/2006 9:55 PM  
Blogger firebird said...

I love the way you created the form of this poem, where the title becomes part of the text. Is this another traditional form I did not know about? Or are you inventing it out of inspiration? Either way it is inspired!

4/23/2006 11:38 AM  
Blogger Amy said...

Ooh, sensual and lovely. Have you been writing your poems outside?

4/24/2006 12:17 PM  
Blogger MB said...

Thank you all.

Amy, I often do... at least partially. This one, yes.

5/04/2006 10:28 AM  

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