The bay
the sun stains the sky
a dark pink, scatters
shadows of waves
in winking black crescents
across the broad blue bay
fine black lines of
lacy trees
separate
sea from sky
a small island, its green barely discernible
in fading light, bears white birds,
resting like flowers in the trees
as our boat passes
one rises, opening its petals to
the final red of the sun
in that moment, when
the last hot brilliance slips
behind the curve of the earth,
the light shifts
a gentle clarity
suffuses all —
water, boat, birds —
with certainty
a dark pink, scatters
shadows of waves
in winking black crescents
across the broad blue bay
fine black lines of
lacy trees
separate
sea from sky
a small island, its green barely discernible
in fading light, bears white birds,
resting like flowers in the trees
as our boat passes
one rises, opening its petals to
the final red of the sun
in that moment, when
the last hot brilliance slips
behind the curve of the earth,
the light shifts
a gentle clarity
suffuses all —
water, boat, birds —
with certainty
18 Comments:
It's good to have you back.
Welcome back. You went away and saw something so beautiful and came back with a present for us!
the last hot brilliance slips
behind the curve of the earth
what a beautiful welcome back with
such a stunning entry for your blog
thank you! thank you! snowsparkle
I can see it and I can hear it! Lovely!
Welcome back
I think you've invented a new style of poetry: romantic zen.
smiles from Spring twinkling eyes,
gd
i like ur poem...
beautiful imagery...
great details
happy poetry month
Oh! What a great closing line!
"with certainty"
Yes, even at that length and structure I can see why garnet david would call it "zen."
Welcome back! If this poetry speaks at all as to how you spent last week, it was a week of delightful beauty.
"...its green barely discernible in fading light, bears white birds, resting like flowers in the trees..." so peaceful and pure.
Nice holiday. I'm envious. :)
with certainty...that tomorrow is another day to fail and succeed. In those rare moments when we get it right, we know why each day comes.
Your last lines were a wise ending to a wise beginning.
Oh, whiskey, thank you! It's good to be welcomed back by you.
RD, there was much that was beautiful, and a gift to me. Thanks for your welcome.
Snowsparkle, thank you for your warm welcome. I'm pleased you enjoyed the poem!
Endment, I'm very glad you felt you could see and hear it. That sense of sharing, of connection, is one of the reasons I keep this blog going. Thanks!
MB,
Read this one yesterday and really enjoyed it. It was just so chaotic at work that I couldn't break away long enough to comment. Glad you're back.
There is a certainty about dusk, isn't there?
It's completely wonderful to have you back, and with a beautiful, heart-warming, inspiring poem! Felt like I was travelling with you~ many thanks. xo
Garnet David, somehow the phrase "romantic zen" seems like it ought to be oxymoronic... yet I think you have pegged something about this poem, and some of the others, quite accurately!
Kai, thanks for stopping by, and for reminding me that it is poetry month... a good month, for many reasons, I think!
Lhombre, however you do it, you seem to have a knack for zeroing in frequently on what are for me the most important aspects of my poems! Thanks!
Sky, there is nothing like being out on the water at sunset... it floats my boat, as they say! Thanks for the welcome.
Gilbert, yes indeed, it was a good holiday! Thanks for stopping by.
Mermaid, thanks for your insights. You are a thoughtful water creature!
Firehawk, well then, I must thank you for stopping by twice! I can appreciate, especially this week, the demands of a busy work schedule. You'll note I'm slow in responding to these messages, for example! ;-) Thanks for taking the time to come back.
Brenda, I wouldn't be surprised if in some manner you weren't travelling with me after all... who knows! Thanks for your kind words of welcome.
lovely... challenging to my own struggle to evoke the 'certainty' that poetic words can paint with few strokes
Gracie, welcome! Thanks for your kind words. I'll come take a look!
Oh how I want to be there, mesmerising
Oh, Sue, it was, it was! Transporting...
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