:: a few feathers dropped ::
posted by MB at 8:15 AM
Bookmarked for a purpose. I am reminded how the haiku form has enough space for a whole story.
i love this - allows the reader to co-create! such soothing imagery.
Such a beautiful intimacy.
Curled up in each other's arms lovely
This is poignant, reassuring intimacy.
Oh, I must be in a mood. Made me think of my long-ago commutes on NYC subways and how I was pressed between some fleshy people just like the metaphor here, only much less beautiful and much more sweaty.But (thank goodness) it also conjures up images of beloved hands clasping hands.Thanks, MB, as always!
This feels more like friendship, the words passing between and touching.
I see your daughter's convinced you to write shorter poems. This one says much in its three lines.
i left this comment earlier on a break at work, but it hasn't shown up here... strangeshort and sweetand totally completei love your blogsthank you and big hugssnowsparkle
So many thoughts evoked by your words...people; translation books of poetry with the original and the English on facing pages...you are amazing!alan
oh, this image looks like my husband and me on a cold winter's night pressed together between blankets and quilts. :)
you have done it again - thanks
Mermaid, the haiku form really does have room for a story but it's tricky to accomplish. Only room for the barest essentials, I think.Anne, yes, co-create is a good way to put it! A gestural sketch like this leaves a lot of room for interpretation.RD, true intimacy takes time to unfold.Sue, could be!Anna, grazie. I'm glad you find it so. Nice to see you here!Lori, I enjoyed both your interpretations! Though I think maybe the dry book nixes an abundance of sweat...zhoen, as you know, there are many interpretations of the word "know." You've identified a very important one.rdl, thanks!!Patry, you are funny! Thanks for the laugh and for the kind comment.Snowsparkle, I've noticed Blogger is buggy again this morning. I can't even see some of my own comments and I'm just *hoping* this will post when I'm done! I'm so glad you enjoy it. I'm always delighted to see you here.Alan, yes! And you are an amazing reader. Thank you.Sky, what a wonderful response. Thanks.Endment, if I have written something that satisfies you, then I am honored!
Phew! It posted!
This leaves me breathless!
mb,Haiku is so very difficult but you make it seem so easy.
Lhombre... Thank you!TLR, this one arrived virtually as is, as a little gift. Most times it's trickier, more like a crossword puzzle, but one that has meaning. But I always enjoy the challenge. The more I write them, the more the rhythm becomes ingrained.
I guess what I should have said as well was "This leaves me impressed!"
Dan, ah, I totally missed your first pun, but the second is even better I think. I've tried to think of a clever riposte but I can't! You are the champ!
Ah, so lovely. I'm a sucker for the short, pithy, ne'r a word extra, poem. This is perfect.
I like this personification.Bookmarks(Interesting to also recall that paper is made from the bark of trees- leaves...)
Leslee, Silvermoon, thanks for your thoughts! I'm glad you enjoyed it.
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