Thursday, May 04, 2006

By touch, by sound

my fingers very softly trace
the lines by your eyes
and down your cheek
these traces of laughter
of moments we have

my fingers smooth the furrows
that run across your brow,
the aches and incremental
worries of yesterdays, or what is
yet to come,
not now

my fingers create their own
memories cast in time and place
here upon your open
skin, like tongues they
sense and taste
each one

I bend down to sing a murmur
into your ear, you who
have lost the use of words,
and feel your warm pulse
slow to the rhythm of
my voice

the rhythm of goodbye


Blogger snowsparkle said...

big tears falling on m keyboard now. i'm sorry for your loss. big hugs, snowsparkle

5/04/2006 10:50 AM  
Blogger MB said...

Thank you, Snowsparkle, for your empathy. It is an old loss, revisited. Some are big that way. But this is how I know to incorporate it into the texture of my life.

5/04/2006 11:09 AM  
Anonymous yllstonewolf said...

such tenderness. beautiful!

5/04/2006 11:41 AM  
Blogger la vie en rose said...

goodbye must be the most difficult word to say. it is filled with so much loss...

beautifully written

5/04/2006 12:15 PM  
Blogger Rexroth's Daughter said...

That rhythm of goodbye. A sad rhythm marked by a slowing pulse. So touching.

5/04/2006 4:35 PM  
Blogger alan said...

Too many times, too many loved ones!

Thank you for these words!


5/05/2006 12:39 AM  
Blogger Lee said...

Great imagery. Great feeling. Thank you for sharing.

5/05/2006 12:59 AM  
Blogger Jean said...

Such gentleness. I felt this physically in my heart as I read it. Surely one of the things we most hope from poetry - that it can speak of the unspeakable, the unspeakably sad, make a space in which to feel the feelings it's all too easy to shut off. I was very glad to read this.

5/05/2006 2:20 AM  
Blogger Endment said...

what a beautiful and pain filled farewell

5/05/2006 3:45 AM  
Blogger gracie said...

That is such a beautiful, beautiful picture of what is a very sacred time. All the more poignant and meaningful because of the depth of the relationship. I spend many similar moments with the dying, but it's not the same when it is someone close to you.

5/05/2006 4:10 AM  
Blogger mermaid said...

Your sense of touch is depicted so vividly in this. Touch for the physical, and touch for the emotional love for this person.

Especially liked the 'incremental worries' bit, like rings of age on a tree.

5/05/2006 8:53 AM  
Blogger Firehawk said...


It's a graceful and gentle sadness. The rhyme works well and doesn't feel at all forced here. Good flow, and the "twist" works well.

5/05/2006 10:21 AM  
Blogger Dale said...


5/05/2006 1:59 PM  
Blogger Mary said...


5/05/2006 3:33 PM  
Anonymous Sara said...

Sweet. I love the discussion of the value of lines in the face. All these crazy people botoxing them away are only robbing the people who love them. The lines in our skins are, among other things, each individual's unique map of our shared experience. You point this out with great delicacy -- and, of course, without the botox rant! heh heh

5/05/2006 4:17 PM  
Blogger rdl said...

wow, i don't know what to say;incredible.

5/05/2006 7:38 PM  
Blogger Tongue in Cheek Antiques said...

such grace and tenderness shared in your rhythm and peace, a goodbye as gentle as autumn leaves falling from a deeply rooted tree.

5/06/2006 9:51 AM  
Blogger Lori Witzel said...

After a rather frenetic "workin' world" day with a few more to ride...thank you for the slow, expansive, opening moment, and the respite I found in this goodbye.

(And thanks for the "safe journeys" wishes!)

5/06/2006 4:48 PM  
Blogger Jean said...

Mes doigts très doucement
tracent les lignes de vos yeux
dessinent sur votre joue
ces traces de rire
des moments
de notre amour .

5/07/2006 1:35 AM  
Blogger T L Reynolds said...

The last line struck me as if I ran smack into a brick wall. This is so very powerful.

5/07/2006 12:15 PM  
Blogger Udge said...

{{{ mb }}}

5/07/2006 12:17 PM  
Blogger leslee said...


5/08/2006 8:59 AM  
Blogger MB said...

My thanks to you all.

5/08/2006 9:47 AM  
Blogger ruth said...

you are such a musician in your words. thank you for this very sensuous and archetypal goodbye.

5/08/2006 10:44 AM  
Blogger Brenda said...

Elegiac, rememberance, tender, so tender, beautiful...

5/08/2006 6:18 PM  
Blogger Sue hardy-Dawson said...

So poingnant it makes my eyes prickle

5/12/2006 11:14 AM  
Blogger MB said...

Ruth, Brenda, Sue, thank you.

5/12/2006 2:37 PM  
Blogger garnet david said...

beautiful and touching

the mix of perception and emotion at those intense times is life molding

5/13/2006 8:24 AM  
Blogger Luanne said...

this poem has a calm, but painful aura.. I felt your fingertips. The end caught me for a few seconds...

Well written mb!

Thank you for this

5/14/2006 10:22 AM  
Blogger MB said...

David and Luanne, thanks.

5/17/2006 8:00 AM  

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