Further in
further in
between the shadows of the leaves
slide sideways
searching
slip through green
into darkness
light shifts
the lens adjusts
eyes widen
the smile lifts
in blue shadows
underneath
tender darkness
blanket-like
reach and touch
roots and tangles
soft soil
damp
depths of
further in
between the shadows of the leaves
slide sideways
searching
slip through green
into darkness
light shifts
the lens adjusts
eyes widen
the smile lifts
in blue shadows
underneath
tender darkness
blanket-like
reach and touch
roots and tangles
soft soil
damp
depths of
further in
posted by MB at 9:27 AM
17 Comments:
The stages of discovery. Beautiful and sensual. I like the lack of a full stop at the end as well ....
ah! this softly spoken journey is so seductive... i have found myself deep in the tender green leaves of undergrowth in the forest of my heart. thank you!
Like Mary and Snowsparkle, I do detect some sensual seduction here. Makes me want to plant some flowers;)
Thanks, mb, for sharing the wonders of this season with us!
I am enjoying all your gifts--the lovely birds, the pine scents in the sun, and the dark coolness in the shade. It is always better when someone else also appreciates, even from across the continent!
beautiful
read it slowly and it becomes mesmerizing.. beautiful piece :)..
Those two final lines seem to describe the direction your poetry has taken. And takes us.
Your walks are amazing...
alan
Your words "slide" like a little snake slipping through "green into darkness" "in blue shadows underneath" touching "roots and tangles" and "soft soil" "depths of/further in." Something softly sensual. And reminds me of Dickinson's poem, Snake somehow. At least that's the perspective suggested to me here... even in the flow of the tiny lines without punctuation or a beginning or ending.
Very nice! Very clean.
Yeah! Couplets! I think they work so well, here, and there's that feeling of a mystery unfolding before you as you read this one. I love it!
i read it and then read it again. this is where i want to go - closer, deeper, further in. it's where all of the magic lives. beautiful!
Wonderful sense of discovery as one slips further in. Love it!!
I felt a small slap from a branchlet on my cheek as I tried to follow...need to go slower.
Love this.
Spare and right.
I feel like I am entering the soul of the earth with your path of words you have written here!
I feel like I am air or water or sunlight, traveling to and through everything.
Thank you all for your generous and thoughtful comments.
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