Thursday, June 01, 2006

Further in

further in
between the shadows of the leaves

slide sideways
searching

slip through green
into darkness

light shifts
the lens adjusts

eyes widen
the smile lifts

in blue shadows
underneath

tender darkness
blanket-like

reach and touch
roots and tangles

soft soil
damp

depths of
further in

18 Comments:

Blogger Mary said...

The stages of discovery. Beautiful and sensual. I like the lack of a full stop at the end as well ....

6/01/2006 9:41 AM  
Blogger snowsparkle said...

ah! this softly spoken journey is so seductive... i have found myself deep in the tender green leaves of undergrowth in the forest of my heart. thank you!

6/01/2006 11:20 AM  
Blogger T L Reynolds said...

Like Mary and Snowsparkle, I do detect some sensual seduction here. Makes me want to plant some flowers;)

6/01/2006 11:41 AM  
Blogger firebird said...

Thanks, mb, for sharing the wonders of this season with us!
I am enjoying all your gifts--the lovely birds, the pine scents in the sun, and the dark coolness in the shade. It is always better when someone else also appreciates, even from across the continent!

6/01/2006 12:33 PM  
Blogger la vie en rose said...

yes! further in--learning to trust the darkness and the shadows

6/01/2006 2:27 PM  
Blogger Poetry by Kai said...

beautiful

6/01/2006 4:31 PM  
Anonymous guile said...

read it slowly and it becomes mesmerizing.. beautiful piece :)..

6/01/2006 7:28 PM  
Blogger Patry Francis said...

Those two final lines seem to describe the direction your poetry has taken. And takes us.

6/01/2006 8:07 PM  
Blogger alan said...

Your walks are amazing...

alan

6/01/2006 11:57 PM  
Blogger Brenda said...

Your words "slide" like a little snake slipping through "green into darkness" "in blue shadows underneath" touching "roots and tangles" and "soft soil" "depths of/further in." Something softly sensual. And reminds me of Dickinson's poem, Snake somehow. At least that's the perspective suggested to me here... even in the flow of the tiny lines without punctuation or a beginning or ending.

6/02/2006 6:07 AM  
Anonymous Sara said...

Very nice! Very clean.

6/02/2006 8:03 AM  
Blogger Firehawk said...

Yeah! Couplets! I think they work so well, here, and there's that feeling of a mystery unfolding before you as you read this one. I love it!

6/02/2006 12:02 PM  
Anonymous yllstonewolf said...

i read it and then read it again. this is where i want to go - closer, deeper, further in. it's where all of the magic lives. beautiful!

6/02/2006 12:19 PM  
Blogger Pat Paulk said...

Wonderful sense of discovery as one slips further in. Love it!!

6/02/2006 12:20 PM  
Blogger Lori Witzel said...

I felt a small slap from a branchlet on my cheek as I tried to follow...need to go slower.

Love this.
Spare and right.

6/02/2006 7:38 PM  
Blogger Tongue in Cheek Antiques said...

I feel like I am entering the soul of the earth with your path of words you have written here!

6/03/2006 1:23 AM  
Blogger mermaid said...

I feel like I am air or water or sunlight, traveling to and through everything.

6/04/2006 10:18 AM  
Blogger MB said...

Thank you all for your generous and thoughtful comments.

6/12/2006 9:13 AM  

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