Tuesday, July 18, 2006

Under these hills

the hills above town
turn brown in summer

a light, golden brown,
color of summer grasses,

when the sky slides west
and the land reaches for the night

the summer sun's loosened light
moves gently across these rough hills

and makes of them a gather
of soft and shadowed velvet

under these hills, my hand moves
along the slow curves of your spine

12 Comments:

Blogger Sky said...

i love this: the alliteration, sounds repeating in rhyme dotted across the lines, beautiful imagery, the sensuous touch of curving spine...it is all a total delight!

7/18/2006 11:09 AM  
Blogger la vie en rose said...

ooooh, that last line got me...

7/18/2006 11:42 AM  
Blogger Dale said...

Oh, that's lovely.

7/18/2006 1:52 PM  
Blogger rdl said...

nice!

7/18/2006 2:54 PM  
Blogger rdl said...

nice!

7/18/2006 2:55 PM  
Blogger Pat Paulk said...

Excellent ending!!

7/18/2006 3:35 PM  
Blogger leslee said...

Woo! Yes, the last line is the kicker. And the alliteration in this is very nice... "the sky slides west" and "the summer sun's loosened light" - very nice.

7/18/2006 5:28 PM  
Blogger GEL said...

Beautiful- The feel of this poem is terrific! Lovely carefree day to night described in riveting beauty ("the sky slides west", "sun's loosened light", "shadowed velvet") and your glorious ending caresses my heartstrings!

7/18/2006 10:40 PM  
Blogger alan said...

Once again, you reach inside and thaw places I didn't know were there!

alan

7/19/2006 12:30 AM  
Anonymous yllstonewolf said...

Oh mb...this is perfect.

7/19/2006 11:32 AM  
Blogger Brenda said...

Perfect, this one is just perfection! Sublime...

7/19/2006 4:29 PM  
Blogger MB said...

Sky, I appreciate your careful reading.

Michelle, that is, of course, where the poem began.

Dale, I'm glad you think so.

rdl, Pat, Leslee, Silvermoon, my thanks to each of you!

Alan, what a wonderful response.

Anne, I think you would appreciate this kind of summer landscape.

Brenda, thank you.

7/20/2006 1:23 PM  

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