Night offering
take a drink
of
water
breathe
watch the flame
of
the candle
flicker
take a drink
of
my heart
breathe
watch the flame
of
my soul
flicker
of
water
breathe
watch the flame
of
the candle
flicker
take a drink
of
my heart
breathe
watch the flame
of
my soul
flicker
posted by MB at 8:09 AM
16 Comments:
Très belle , très pure poésie .
J'aime sa musique , ses reprises , son balancement .
"prenez la boisson
de
mon coeur
respirez
observez la flamme
de
mon âme
clignotement ."
C'est très beau !
C'est l'ivresse !!!!
Le peintre , le musicien , le poète , tous ceux qui aiment la beauté sous tous ses aspects , parlent la même langue , partagent la même émotion sans avoir recours aux mots .
(La poésie fait semblant d'utiliser les mots , elle est bien au delà )
Je vibre à ta poèsie comme tu aimes mes couleurs ..
Nous partageons ....avec tous .
I've been feeling just that way about somone recently. This little poem is the tonic I needed.
J'aime aussi let mots et les idées de Jean. Je manque la culture française.
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I love concise writing like this. There is so much emotion and movement packed in this little piece.
The dancing flame. Sometimes it has so much light in its steadfast burning, and other times it collapses under the weight of darkness.
I like the different styles of poetry you have been wearing lately.
The symmetry here works perfectly, but the second half expands and creates a whole new universe based on fragility...
This gem touches me on so many layers. Intimate, profound, telling.
The flame
from
your work
lights
my soul!
alan
I love the balance of intensity and sparseness of this poem.
powerful and succinct. like a meditation.
How elegant.
Ce que vous dites ici me plait beacoup, Jean, un grand merci! Je crois que vous avez raison.
Garnet, I never know how these bits I post will be received or who is going to respond to what (or not) so I'm glad to know it was a tonic for you.
Thank you, Mary.
TLReynolds, thanks for stopping by. I'm pleased you enjoyed this poem.
Mermaid, I suppose there have been a few different styles recently. I don't think of it that way, consciously, I just write... and am sometimes amazed and sometimes amused by what comes out!
Brenda, I appreciate that you picked up on the fragility.
Gemma Grace, thank you for such kind words.
Alan, what a wonderful way to respond!
RD, an intensity and sparseness not that far flung from haiku, perhaps!
Anne, and Leslee, thank you very much. I'm honored you see it that way.
Beautiful. I love the soft rhythmic pattern. So simple and so complex. Beautiful.
Ah, yes! And the last stanza is inspired.
Frankie, and Richard, thank you.
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