Wednesday, February 07, 2007

Blurred lines

on the verge of the road it is hard
to see just where the gravel shoulder merges
with the lapping, dusty sagebrush sea

I wake in the rumbling darkness
nestled among the sliding,
brushy slopes of sage,
from dreaming

that I am driving the car
the length of your
long, glowing thigh

I want to enter your ocean
completely, I want to taste
your salty margins, I want

the wind of your kisses
to engulf me so that where
I end and you begin

is lost


Blogger Jean said...

Oh. Wonderful. The interweaving words and images and levels. The slide into metaphor like sliding onto the hard shoulder(yes, shoulder). Oh. Exceptional, even for you, I think.

2/07/2007 8:43 AM  
Blogger Fred Garber said...

Hot! Hot! Hot!

2/07/2007 9:47 AM  
Anonymous sage said...

such innuendo and simile, profound!
love this!


2/07/2007 12:21 PM  
Blogger Firehawk said...


This is a beautiful, romatic piece. I really enjoy your word usage here, and the rhythm of the phrases.

2/07/2007 1:15 PM  
Blogger polona said...

wow! lovely rhythm, sensual images!

love the shot, too!

2/07/2007 1:37 PM  
Blogger mermaid said...

Works for me. Erase away.

2/07/2007 3:07 PM  
Blogger Pauline said...

from the image of the road and shoulder merging to the blur of your own margins, this is a very compelling piece

2/07/2007 4:11 PM  
Blogger Leslee said...


2/07/2007 4:38 PM  
Blogger Dave said...

How intersting that you were also writing about blurred boundaries and waking today!

2/07/2007 7:17 PM  
Blogger Snowsparkle said...

i want whatever you're having! delicious vignette!!! i'll have some sweet dreams tonight!

2/07/2007 7:47 PM  
Blogger alan said...

Those last two verses are stunning!



2/08/2007 12:36 AM  
Blogger Pat Paulk said...

The lines do get blurred sometimes. I only get dreams like that on pay-per-view. Got my blood to bubbling!!

2/08/2007 2:34 AM  
Anonymous tongue in cheek said...

oh Mama! Whew.
That spun me off the road!

2/08/2007 6:18 AM  
Blogger gautami tripathy said...

I find clarity in the blurred images!

2/08/2007 10:10 AM  
Blogger floots said...

oh boy
i like this for its imagery
and its intimacy

2/08/2007 11:13 AM  
Anonymous Anonymous said...

not bad.

2/08/2007 7:42 PM  
Blogger MB said...

Jean, thanks for seeing so much of this. (Shoulders on the brain these days!)

Fred, es verdad.

Sage, thank you, much appreciated.

Firehawk, I'm glad you saw the rhythm, I wasn't sure that would come through.

Polona, thanks. The photo is from last year.

Mermaid, great comment. ;-)

Pauline, thank you. It's all the same line.

Leslee, thanks.

Dave, yeah, taking it in completely different directions, though.

Snowsparkle, glad you enjoyed it.

Alan, thanks!

Pat, they often do. Thanks.

Corey, yeah, something like that!

Gautami, thanks for that insight!

Floots, much appreciated.

Anonymous, thanks.

2/09/2007 9:32 AM  

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