Blurred lines
on the verge of the road it is hard
to see just where the gravel shoulder merges
with the lapping, dusty sagebrush sea
I wake in the rumbling darkness
nestled among the sliding,
brushy slopes of sage,
from dreaming
that I am driving the car
the length of your
long, glowing thigh
I want to enter your ocean
completely, I want to taste
your salty margins, I want
the wind of your kisses
to engulf me so that where
I end and you begin
is lost
posted by MB at 8:33 AM
16 Comments:
Oh. Wonderful. The interweaving words and images and levels. The slide into metaphor like sliding onto the hard shoulder(yes, shoulder). Oh. Exceptional, even for you, I think.
Hot! Hot! Hot!
such innuendo and simile, profound!
love this!
sage
MB,
This is a beautiful, romatic piece. I really enjoy your word usage here, and the rhythm of the phrases.
wow! lovely rhythm, sensual images!
love the shot, too!
Works for me. Erase away.
from the image of the road and shoulder merging to the blur of your own margins, this is a very compelling piece
How intersting that you were also writing about blurred boundaries and waking today!
i want whatever you're having! delicious vignette!!! i'll have some sweet dreams tonight!
Those last two verses are stunning!
Completely!
alan
The lines do get blurred sometimes. I only get dreams like that on pay-per-view. Got my blood to bubbling!!
oh Mama! Whew.
That spun me off the road!
I find clarity in the blurred images!
oh boy
i like this for its imagery
and its intimacy
not bad.
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Jean, thanks for seeing so much of this. (Shoulders on the brain these days!)
Fred, es verdad.
Sage, thank you, much appreciated.
Firehawk, I'm glad you saw the rhythm, I wasn't sure that would come through.
Polona, thanks. The photo is from last year.
Mermaid, great comment. ;-)
Pauline, thank you. It's all the same line.
Leslee, thanks.
Dave, yeah, taking it in completely different directions, though.
Snowsparkle, glad you enjoyed it.
Alan, thanks!
Pat, they often do. Thanks.
Corey, yeah, something like that!
Gautami, thanks for that insight!
Floots, much appreciated.
Anonymous, thanks.
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