Tense
the past tense was easy
so was the future tense
the present tense was most demanding
the sun rose
you woke under the covers
silently
each moment
more real than a solitary rosary bead
so was the future tense
the present tense was most demanding
the sun rose
you woke under the covers
silently
each moment
more real than a solitary rosary bead
posted by MB at 4:53 PM
25 Comments:
Feeling a little tense?
wow!!
I love the rocks, they look like heads.
I was singing this song today,
"...And the sun poured in like butterscotch and stuck to all my senses
Oh, wont you stay
We'll put on the day
And well talk in present tenses..."
Beautiful photograph. The present tense is the zen moment.
After your words made me "mmmmm" I did a double take on the photo; the first glance I thought it was water shot to blur, then I realized...
:o)
alan
this one is stunning
especially like that rosary bead image
thank you
wow! lovely poem!
I like the thought of the longer we sit in the Sun the more/easier we flow. Amazing what bathing in the light can do for us.
zhoen, hah! Yeah.
rdl, my goodness, thanks!
Marja-Leena, aren't those wonderful? The area is littered with curious rock formations and I agree, they do look like heads, maybe even a little reminiscent of Easter Island.
Robin Andrea, your song is a good match. Thanks!
Alan, yes, it's an interesting combination with the green, isn't it?
Floots, thank you. I especially liked your silvery sand and sea image. And I'm still chuckling over your moonshine story.
Miss Magic, thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Pat, I picked that photo on instinct, but you've articulated one of the reasons. Thanks.
Present....awake...demanding....solitary rosary bead.....Such a good poem!
I'm not sure if the play on 'tense' was on purpose, but I like it. The present is not tense, but sometimes it is so hard to just be here.
Fred, thanks for reading it that way. I really appreciate it.
Mermaid, absolutely, tension was intended as an undercurrent in this. "Sometimes it is so hard to just be here" — sums it up! The future and past, so easily slipped into, can color the present, making it appear tense.
Nice! One of your best, I think.
stunning photo to complement your wonderful words!
perfect tense...
My soul had tensed when I read this pluperfect poem, but it recovered, in time, and the past became historic.
great combination!
Thanks for that warmth!
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I like the rosary bead...
And the picture--gives me the same monstrous feeling as the ropey roof-to-ground icicles that are blocking my side door.
Feels like a brief summary of life - how it was to be here doing this.
Wonderfully put.
the present tense was most demanding
So true, especailly in my life right now.
I love a curve in a road, and your photo is all curve. Nice contrast with the freeze-frame end of your poem, MB.
:-)
Nice. Every moment both demanding and sacred.
Terrific, as usual.
your poems enlight and enrich my days! Thank you for sharing your gift!
excellent ... words fitting the photograph. :o)
oh my, yes! i'm a latecomer to this poem, but it startled me as if i had just been born and taken my first breath. wow!
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