Tuesday, March 06, 2007

Tense

the past tense was easy
so was the future tense
the present tense was most demanding

the sun rose
you woke under the covers
silently

each moment
more real than a solitary rosary bead


25 Comments:

Blogger zhoen said...

Feeling a little tense?

3/06/2007 4:44 PM  
Blogger rdl said...

wow!!

3/06/2007 5:18 PM  
Anonymous Marja-Leena said...

I love the rocks, they look like heads.

3/06/2007 6:06 PM  
Blogger robin andrea said...

I was singing this song today,
"...And the sun poured in like butterscotch and stuck to all my senses
Oh, wont you stay
We'll put on the day
And well talk in present tenses..."

Beautiful photograph. The present tense is the zen moment.

3/06/2007 6:13 PM  
Blogger alan said...

After your words made me "mmmmm" I did a double take on the photo; the first glance I thought it was water shot to blur, then I realized...

:o)

alan

3/06/2007 11:58 PM  
Blogger floots said...

this one is stunning
especially like that rosary bead image
thank you

3/07/2007 12:01 AM  
Blogger miss magic said...

wow! lovely poem!

3/07/2007 4:15 AM  
Blogger Pat Paulk said...

I like the thought of the longer we sit in the Sun the more/easier we flow. Amazing what bathing in the light can do for us.

3/07/2007 5:48 AM  
Blogger MB said...

zhoen, hah! Yeah.

rdl, my goodness, thanks!

Marja-Leena, aren't those wonderful? The area is littered with curious rock formations and I agree, they do look like heads, maybe even a little reminiscent of Easter Island.

Robin Andrea, your song is a good match. Thanks!

Alan, yes, it's an interesting combination with the green, isn't it?

Floots, thank you. I especially liked your silvery sand and sea image. And I'm still chuckling over your moonshine story.

Miss Magic, thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed it.

Pat, I picked that photo on instinct, but you've articulated one of the reasons. Thanks.

3/07/2007 8:12 AM  
Blogger Fred Garber said...

Present....awake...demanding....solitary rosary bead.....Such a good poem!

3/07/2007 8:59 AM  
Blogger mermaid said...

I'm not sure if the play on 'tense' was on purpose, but I like it. The present is not tense, but sometimes it is so hard to just be here.

3/07/2007 11:32 AM  
Blogger MB said...

Fred, thanks for reading it that way. I really appreciate it.

Mermaid, absolutely, tension was intended as an undercurrent in this. "Sometimes it is so hard to just be here" — sums it up! The future and past, so easily slipped into, can color the present, making it appear tense.

3/07/2007 12:23 PM  
Anonymous Dave said...

Nice! One of your best, I think.

3/08/2007 8:35 AM  
Blogger polona said...

stunning photo to complement your wonderful words!
perfect tense...

3/08/2007 10:46 AM  
Blogger charlie said...

My soul had tensed when I read this pluperfect poem, but it recovered, in time, and the past became historic.

3/08/2007 2:56 PM  
Blogger Pod said...

great combination!

3/09/2007 1:18 AM  
Blogger marlyat2 said...

Thanks for that warmth!

***

I like the rosary bead...

And the picture--gives me the same monstrous feeling as the ropey roof-to-ground icicles that are blocking my side door.

3/09/2007 6:52 AM  
Blogger Tall Girl said...

Feels like a brief summary of life - how it was to be here doing this.

3/09/2007 9:39 AM  
Anonymous Cathy said...

Wonderfully put.

the present tense was most demanding

So true, especailly in my life right now.

3/09/2007 5:01 PM  
Blogger Lori Witzel said...

I love a curve in a road, and your photo is all curve. Nice contrast with the freeze-frame end of your poem, MB.

:-)

3/10/2007 12:26 PM  
Blogger leslee said...

Nice. Every moment both demanding and sacred.

3/10/2007 4:17 PM  
Blogger Ralph Murre said...

Terrific, as usual.

3/10/2007 9:33 PM  
Anonymous tongue in cheek said...

your poems enlight and enrich my days! Thank you for sharing your gift!

3/12/2007 4:58 AM  
Blogger trinitystar said...

excellent ... words fitting the photograph. :o)

3/12/2007 7:49 AM  
Blogger snowsparkle said...

oh my, yes! i'm a latecomer to this poem, but it startled me as if i had just been born and taken my first breath. wow!

3/12/2007 10:55 PM  

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