Monday, July 31, 2006

Lose your self

lose your self
stand in the dappled shadows of time
see with river eyes
breathe in and out the glinting currents intertwined
let love move
in perpetual motion, theirs, yours, with mine


Anonymous Anonymous said...

I love the instructional approach in "Low Wind" and "Lose Your Self."

7/31/2006 12:42 PM  
Blogger snowsparkle said...

the startling beauty of your words creates such a picture in my mind!!! ah, i can't stop gasping at this powerful piece. thanks!

7/31/2006 1:16 PM  
Blogger la vie en rose said...

i think i just might...

7/31/2006 1:25 PM  
Blogger Pat Paulk said...

Words to build a world around!! Beautifully written!!

7/31/2006 1:45 PM  
Blogger mermaid said...

I am lost in this. What an enormous hug of blissful words, enough for us all!

7/31/2006 6:14 PM  
Blogger alan said...

"What the world needs now..."


8/01/2006 12:23 AM  
Anonymous Anonymous said...

this piece is so fulfilling.. thanks for making me feel so positive after reading this :)..

8/01/2006 2:02 AM  
Blogger Lee said...

That's lovely.

8/01/2006 4:26 AM  
Anonymous Anonymous said...

Your poem inspires one:

fill this body
take shape, rising in equal light
from a new sun
the day begins, see shadows fall away
your fingers move
the first, unfamiliar reach of life.

8/01/2006 9:02 AM  
Blogger Brenda Clews said...

"see with river eyes" - marvelous! It's all love, every breath and molecule, and you are the poet of love...

8/01/2006 12:55 PM  
Blogger MB said...

TLR, in my own experience of it, it's more of a visualization, almost a prayer, than instruction.

Snowsparkle, woman becoming a river, I shouldn't be surprised that this hit home for you.

Michelle, thank you!

Pat, I wish we could, I wish we would!

Mermaid, thank you!

Alan, yes. You certainly get it. I wish more in this world would.

Lee, thank you!

Cliff, oh you honor me, to think my poem might inspire another. Thank you.

Brenda, every breath and molecule. It's there, if only...

Word verification: gefeod... isn't this an Anglo Saxon word? (Dale?)

8/01/2006 7:29 PM  
Blogger Yes said...

I love "see with river eyes"!
And the subtle rhymes, again...
Is this form something traditional that I don't know? It is quite irresistible!
And I see Cliff was inspired by the form, also.
A beautiful place to live in, this poem.

8/01/2006 8:26 PM  
Blogger Lori Witzel said...

Ahhhhh...thanks for the respite.

8/02/2006 4:19 AM  
Blogger MB said...

Firebird, if it is a traditional form, I'm not aware of it. The form of this came out of my desire to alternate a short, more emphatic call with a longer, more soothing response. The rhyme seemed to me to fit well with the second line as part of setting up that rhythm. Thank you for your kind words.

Lori, thanks as always for reading!

8/02/2006 7:22 PM  
Anonymous Anonymous said...

mb - this is my plan. soothing and beautiful!

8/03/2006 9:09 AM  

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