Tuesday, March 14, 2006

The present mystery

we stand on the surface of eternity
ankle deep in the mystery that surrounds us

but forget that —

let me touch one more time
the rough skin of your face
and press my lips against it,
against yours, inhaling
the scent of my skin touching yours —

time enough for eternity —
oh, after

14 Comments:

Blogger alan said...

Again you take
my breath away
my heart
skipping a beat
as it tries to
leave my chest
reaching to yours!

alan

3/14/2006 9:58 AM  
Blogger Sky said...

You are being inspired by some loving... :)

3/14/2006 11:34 AM  
Blogger Rexroth's Daughter said...

I read this poem through the filter of the anniversary of my father's death. So, I catch the longing for one more touch of skin, one more kiss and hold it like a daughter holds her dying father's hand.

3/14/2006 11:54 AM  
Blogger MB said...

Alan, what a wonderful response. Thank you.

Sky, yes, I receive much love and it does inspire me.

RD, I am honored.

All... when I write poems, I hope to write them in such a way that the reader can bring to them what they experience in their own lives, not be simply locked into what particulars inspired me. It's hard to do, while remaining concrete enough to be vivid. But it sounds like you three have each appreciated this in different ways, none of them wrong, and that is a real gift to me. Thank you.

3/14/2006 12:31 PM  
Blogger T L Reynolds said...

The format makes my eyes jump back to the line "but forget that--" which gives me an interesting take on this.

3/14/2006 1:33 PM  
Blogger Firehawk said...

MB,

This is a lovely little poem! To me, very playful and yet successful in drawing forth the mood.

3/14/2006 1:49 PM  
Blogger Lhombre said...

oh, gosh.

3/14/2006 5:45 PM  
Blogger Brenda said...

"inhaling
the scent of my skin touching yours" is so delicate, sensitive, I love that line, how real the touch of love is.

3/14/2006 5:54 PM  
Blogger zhoen said...

Time enough for eternity.

Thank you.

3/15/2006 5:32 AM  
Blogger Patry Francis said...

Sensual and ethereal at once.

3/15/2006 1:10 PM  
Blogger MB said...

TLR, I played with the line breaks a fair amount before settling on these. There's a world of difference depending on how you break the lines.

Firehawk, it pulls really on two different moods at the same time. I'm glad you felt that.

Lhombre, gracias, Chico!

Brenda, I'm glad to hear you say that. I wanted a very real touch right there, right then.

((Zhoen))

Patry, that's exactly the contrast I was trying to express. Thank you.

3/15/2006 1:29 PM  
Blogger Jean said...

"laissez-moi toucher
une fois de plus
la peau rugueuse de votre visage
et serrez mes lèvres
contre lui,
contre les vôtres,
inhalant
le parfum de ma peau touchant la vôtre --

Très belle poésie !!si émouvante !!!

3/16/2006 4:29 AM  
Blogger MB said...

Merci, Jean. Je suis heureuse qu'elle vous plait.

3/16/2006 8:23 AM  
Blogger kasturi said...

i love this, moose, and i'm copying it out to write on a card for my sweet love - today is our anniversary, 33 years.

3/16/2006 11:33 AM  

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