Familiar tracings
skin
water
soap
trousers
shirt
tie
cup
spoon
shell
phone
dog
jacket
door
gearshift
luggage
escalator
ticket
lips
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The latest edition of Ringing of the Bards: First Things First poetry carnival is up at Tiel's blog.
posted by MB at 9:13 AM
19 Comments:
MB,
I'm very fond of this one. It's a very effective use of the "list" style. Very effective compression of language, so that we can all follow the action, with just nouns. I'm intrigued!
Yum. I like this a lot.
simple words that tell a story...
love it!
(fabulous photo!)
Easy to spiral down, but difficult to stay at the center and appreciate the petals around us.
Great reminder.
Love the list, especially the last.
Wow, this is so cool. Very nice - a whole story in... 17 single words. Yes, yum.
I'm so glad other people are fuzzy about numbers, too. Perhaps the English version of haiku came to mind, with 17 syllables?
Another carnival... I really only knew the "tree" one. And I think you chose the right poem.
I like this a lot. An intriguing journey paved with such simple words.
oh, yum!!!! love the list!!!
Gives me an itch to travel!
:o)
alan
Lips! I love lips. So intimate and eliptical.
The power of words - well done, MB!
cool
I like this!
So simple yet so complex..
This tugs at my heart...
Wow. I love the idea behind this. Really good poem. It could go in a lot of directions, too.
Amazing-- just single words, yet quite the poem!
I followed your sequence with much delight - the punch line is so fine!
Thanks so much, everyone!
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