Monday, March 12, 2007

Familiar tracings


















skin
water
soap

trousers
shirt
tie

cup
spoon
shell

phone
dog
jacket

door
gearshift
luggage

escalator
ticket
lips


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The latest edition of Ringing of the Bards: First Things First poetry carnival is up at Tiel's blog.

21 Comments:

Blogger Firehawk said...

MB,

I'm very fond of this one. It's a very effective use of the "list" style. Very effective compression of language, so that we can all follow the action, with just nouns. I'm intrigued!

3/12/2007 11:55 AM  
Blogger Jean said...

Yum. I like this a lot.

3/12/2007 12:18 PM  
Blogger polona said...

simple words that tell a story...
love it!
(fabulous photo!)

3/12/2007 2:13 PM  
Blogger mermaid said...

Easy to spiral down, but difficult to stay at the center and appreciate the petals around us.

Great reminder.

3/12/2007 2:13 PM  
Blogger Pat Paulk said...

Love the list, especially the last.

3/12/2007 4:17 PM  
Blogger leslee said...

Wow, this is so cool. Very nice - a whole story in... 17 single words. Yes, yum.

3/12/2007 5:15 PM  
Blogger marlyat2 said...

I'm so glad other people are fuzzy about numbers, too. Perhaps the English version of haiku came to mind, with 17 syllables?

Another carnival... I really only knew the "tree" one. And I think you chose the right poem.

3/12/2007 6:05 PM  
Blogger littlepurplecow said...

I like this a lot. An intriguing journey paved with such simple words.

3/12/2007 9:08 PM  
Blogger snowsparkle said...

oh, yum!!!! love the list!!!

3/12/2007 10:56 PM  
Blogger alan said...

Gives me an itch to travel!

:o)

alan

3/13/2007 12:36 AM  
Blogger Tall Girl said...

Lips! I love lips. So intimate and eliptical.

3/13/2007 2:28 AM  
Blogger Pauline said...

The power of words - well done, MB!

3/13/2007 4:06 AM  
Blogger rdl said...

cool

3/13/2007 10:48 AM  
Blogger gautami tripathy said...

I like this!

So simple yet so complex..

3/14/2007 9:07 AM  
Blogger la vie en rose said...

i love the beautiful simplicity of this.

3/14/2007 9:32 AM  
Blogger firebird said...

This tugs at my heart...

3/14/2007 10:17 PM  
Blogger Mary said...

Wow. I love the idea behind this. Really good poem. It could go in a lot of directions, too.

3/15/2007 5:36 PM  
Blogger EATING POETRY said...

Amazing-- just single words, yet quite the poem!

3/16/2007 11:24 PM  
Blogger Bitterroot said...

I followed your sequence with much delight - the punch line is so fine!

3/19/2007 7:09 AM  
Blogger MB said...

Thanks so much, everyone!

3/19/2007 6:20 PM  
Blogger kasturi said...

i, too, like this one, mb dear.

4/09/2007 1:17 AM  

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